She hit hard, a sudden jolt. Heart leaping, he felt her pulling away. She was fighting for freedom, he to catch her. The thin line between them determined success or failure. The run ended, the two united. He admired her beauty, but had to release her. The fish swam away.
As I read your story, I become more excited toward the end. I liked how you made it blurry until the last sentence. Very well written!
ReplyDeleteAgreed, that was good and I like the twist. I did not expect this story to be about fishing, but after re-reading it makes perfect sense and you can put yourself in that exact emotional situation.
ReplyDeleteWho says fishing isn’t exhilarating?
Somehow I felt that was fish in the beginning. But that did not take any curiousity away from reading till the end. Good thing from your part that you let her go.
ReplyDeleteProbably it is similar with any other animal too. I did similar to a piegon who somehow got trapped in my aprtment. I open the door and made him fly out...felt good from inside
Nice one, I though it was going to be a romantic story. It was really nice how you ended it, thanks for the entertainment.
ReplyDeleteThis was a very powerful story. I really enjoyed this story a lot, especially since I went shark fishing 25 miles off the coast of Rhode Island last weekend! I can totally relate.
ReplyDeleteThis is a small version of pulp fiction. I thought I had the main point, “oh two people met during the civil war and fell in love”. Nope, not even close...
ReplyDeleteGood twist!
Well done Greg! While reading through the story my mind was rapidly coming up with different possibilities as to what it was really about. Fishing was a very unexpected and entertainig way to end it.
ReplyDeleteI knew it was fishing right from the start. When I finished reading I thought, Greg didn't have to mention it was a fish, everyone would have known. I found your stroy to be very Thoreau Walden Pondish.
ReplyDeleteGood job on your story. I didn't expect it to be about fishing. It definitely had me captured the whole time.
ReplyDeleteThis was awesome!!! I didn't expect it to be a fish at all at the end. I was trying to figure out what was going on with these two lovers and then had to laugh out loud wen I was so totally wrong.
ReplyDeleteGood use of double entendre to capture the tension of both fishing and romance!
ReplyDeleteGreg,
ReplyDeleteAfter reading the title and before reading the story I thought it would be about two people falling in love. Then I thought it was about two people who were in love with one another but were not working out. However, as the end distinguishes it was about a fish all along. This was certainly unexpected and totally caught me by surprise. I also evoked some emotion out of me because, as silly as it may seem, I feel wicked guilty catching fish. I don’t have a problem eating fish, but I have a problem knowing I killed the animal if that makes sense. With that said, it made me happy when the fisherman released her at the end of the story. Very create and very well written!
Greg,
ReplyDeleteAwesome story..being a fisherman myself I really enjoyed your play on words and reference to the prized catch as if it were a loved one.
Great!